The length of the working week does not reflect modern lifestyle needs, it should be substantially reduced to give people more leisure time with their families, how far do you agree with this statement,

In most countries,the general working

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of an individual is forty to

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hours

a week. Sometimes people voluntarily

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overtime so that they get a surplus of money for their family's needs. Unfortunately, these long working

hours

do not allow enough leisure

time

for someone to spend with his family. I strongly believe that the government should set new rules of work and find more sustainable ways to allow an individual to spend

time

with his family. In

this

competitive world, people feel obliged to work the

hours

set by the laws and companies as they are conscious that they have a family and to be able to support their needs, they have no choice other than to work hard.

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when an individual works a

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time

job, the

time

he spends with his family is reduced.

Consequently

, it may have an impact on young children. Facts have proved that when children lack the

time

and affection of their parents, they have the tendency to become aggressive,

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may lead to delinquency. The government and companies should find sustainable ways so that the employees can treasure precious

time

with their families. I personally think if a couple

have

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kids, one of the parents should get the chance to spend more

time

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wit

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his kids and

also

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able to get a decent wage at the same

time

so that he may cater

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needs of his family.

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, I personally think that the law for maternity should be two years at least

,

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so that the baby gets the

affections

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and all the

time

a mother should spend with his kid which will enhance

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good development of that child. In future, with business sustainability, I hope that technologies implemented in companies would alleviate the core

hours

of people and eventually they will be able to enjoy more

time

with their families.