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Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more homes.Some people think that new homes should be constructed in existing cities. Do you agree or disagree.

#countries #population #growth #homes #people #cities
It is
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true
ture
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true
 that a high rate of population has become a major concern in many countries these days.
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 people have different views about building new constructions should take place in rural
areas
, while others believe that it is good to use existing cities for making residential buildings.
However
, I would agree with
this
 that new houses should be built in my countryside as it will help in rural development and will be beneficial for
city
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 environment
also
.
Firstly
, it will open
the
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new methods of employment for the rural public.
In addition
,
through
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this
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 new schools, hospitals, recreation centres and industries will be built there, which in turn will a large workforce to do the work.
Similarly
, an increased residency in any area will encourage the government to provide improved facilities
such
 as better roads and universities. On the
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other
ther
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other
 hand, building new apartments in existing urban
areas
 will spread a sustainable impact throughout the city environment like traffic on the roads.
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, using
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extreme vehicles will lead to air pollution as well as traffic jam during peak hours.
Moreover
, due to lack of space
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 authorities may have to collapse gardens and parks in order to provide more homes.
For instance
, activities of people will rely on electronic devices and reduce
public
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 daily curriculum. In conclusion, It is clear that providing more residential facilities
at
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countryside
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the countryside
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 will aid in
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 development of
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the
thr
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the
 rural
areas
 in various ways.
Nevertheless
, I strongly believe that building new houses in rural
areas
 will outweigh the drawbacks compared to
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 benefits.
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