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Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more homes.Some people think that new homes should be constructed in existing cities. Do you agree or disagree.

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It is
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 that a high rate of population has become a major concern in many countries these days.
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 people have different views about building new constructions should take place in rural
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, while others believe that it is good to use existing cities for making residential buildings.
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, I would agree with
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 that new houses should be built in my countryside as it will help in rural development and will be beneficial for
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new methods of employment for the rural public.
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 new schools, hospitals, recreation centres and industries will be built there, which in turn will a large workforce to do the work.
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, an increased residency in any area will encourage the government to provide improved facilities
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 as better roads and universities. On the
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 hand, building new apartments in existing urban
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 will spread a sustainable impact throughout the city environment like traffic on the roads.
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extreme vehicles will lead to air pollution as well as traffic jam during peak hours.
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, due to lack of space
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 authorities may have to collapse gardens and parks in order to provide more homes.
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, activities of people will rely on electronic devices and reduce
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 daily curriculum. In conclusion, It is clear that providing more residential facilities
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countryside
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 will aid in
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 development of
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 in various ways.
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, I strongly believe that building new houses in rural
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 will outweigh the drawbacks compared to
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 benefits.
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