Many small, local shops are closing as they are unable to compete with large supermarkets in the area. How does this affect local communities? How could this situation be improved?
Yearly, a lot of small and local
businesses
will close in different neighbourhoods because they can not compete against international and big companies. In this
essay, you will see two types of problems which this
behaviour causes to the small shops
and some solutions for them.
To begin
with, local people
of area
Correct article usage
the area
wants
sometimes Verb problem
apply
to
use their own local and Fix the infinitive
apply
city
product
which they can find Fix the agreement mistake
products
them
in small stores by their own Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
but, when branch supermarkets will
come, they can not sell whatever they want because they have their Verb problem
apply
products
to sell not the local one. Correct word choice
own products
Also
, this
will destroy small market businesses
and unfortunately, the owners should leave that city
. For example
, when Walmart appears in small cities, local people
will get
shocked, because Walmart has better deals and benefits for their customers Verb problem
be
instead
of local shops
, as a result
, owners of small businesses
will leave that city
and people
who live there can not find their local products
anymore.
However
, the solution for the first problem is simple, as the company select the manager of that new branch from that city
, he can add some local food and products
to the store so that people
can have both their local products
and the normal one. In addition
, for the other problem, government
and leaders of those small cities can help local Correct article usage
the government
businesses
and small supermarkets to stay alive and compete with huge supermarkets which helps that
Correct determiner usage
the
city
people
to get interested to have
their Change preposition
in having
shops
. Correct word choice
own shops
For instance
, the government can take fewer taxes and electricity bills from small shops
which helps them not worry about such
things.
To conclude
, international and big markets can not have local products
if their manager does not be aware of those local products
and for small shops
is impossible to stay against huge companies which they have to close and leave but, if the manager of those shops
were from that city
, he can have a local product in the store and government with only small financial support can keep the small businesses
alive.Submitted by jaberi.mahyar on
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