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The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing? Give some reasons and solutions for it.

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The two maps illustrate the industrial
area
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 now and planned future modernization of
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place
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 in the town of Norbiton. In general, it can be clearly observed that now the vast
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 of the industrial
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 is undeveloped.
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, in the future plan,
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place
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 is going to have significant changes in construction, resulting development of infrastructure and facilities. Looking at the details, it is evident that today
this
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place
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 is almost vacant and unused. There is a long river on the north side of
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 industrial
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, while the town is located far to the west.
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, there are a small number of factories.
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 spot will later undergo striking modernization in the future. In a
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 where infrastructure almost did not exist before, now will be a big urban
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. There will be plenty of new installations,
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, a playground, school, shops and medical centre. There will be a lot of houses as well.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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