Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.* Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some individuals believe that advertising is highly successful at convincing

people

to buy things. while some

people

believe that advertising is very popular to an

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where

people

don't pay

attention

to it.

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essay will discuss both

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and

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will give my point of view. on the one hand, advertisement

play

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a major role in

marketing

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the marketing

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world as it

capture

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the

consumer

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attention

to buy items

this

happens when

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apply

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companies

campanies

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companies

display their interesting strategies to promote

their

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. product many

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companies

campanies

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companies

pay

celeberities

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celebrities

or influencers who have a lot of followers to promote their products.

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make up

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companies pay influencers to do

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reviews of their products on their pages,

nyma

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name

being one of them she's an influencer who has over 1.5

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subscribers on

youtube

she is a beauty advocate who speaks on diversity in beauty aisles and most of her videos are sponsored. When she

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new dark skin

make up

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on her

youtube

page her videos gain

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a lot

alot

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a lot

attention

such

as likes, shares and comments and due to

this

promotion

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many of her followers who are the same shade as her get easily

influence

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and buy these products

immediatily

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immediately

on the other hand

, many

people

do not pay

attention

to commercials because they appear everywhere and are common to be seen on other social media

platform

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such

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youtube

instagram

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facebook

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twitter

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, television and on billboards and due

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repetitiveness they become annoying and boring for

people

to watch or read.

for

instance

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many

youtube

viewers often skip ads when the ads

begins

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and as a consequence of

this

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the

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companies

campanies

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companies

fell to promote their product and

loses

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customer

costomer

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customers

. in conclusion,

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are reasonable points on each

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partly agree with each side as

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believe that ads are really good for spreading awareness and they can

also

be harmful when they are based on false information and misleading information.

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