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People say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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Interestingly, some individuals hold the view that hard work beats talent. I could not agree more with
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 statement. The opinion will be examined in the essay.
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 of all, it is crucial to be diligent in whatever a person does in order to be successful. It is obvious, that achievement demands a lot of patience, consistency and practice.
For instance
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, few people know, that the
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 Henry Fords company called Detroit went bankrupt.
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, the inventor did not give up and continued working hard.
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, Henry Ford’s organisation called Ford Motor Company has become a lucrative and profitable business. So, if Ford had stopped working hard when he failed for the
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 time, he would not have achieved
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 advance.
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 example shows that it is not necessary to have a gift to be able to achieve success but it is absolutely vital to be consistent and never stop working.
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 talent might help significantly to achieve a goal, it is still not a non-negotiable necessity. To illustrate, a study conducted at Chinese University in 2017 has shown, that participants who had a predisposition to learning languages but had no aspiration to practice failed their exams up to 35% often, that those who had no gift in mastering new languages but had been studying hard before taking tests. Undoubtedly, self-discipline and hard work are instrumental and sometimes may be more important than talent. To conclude, without a doubt, a gift and a predisposition play essential roles in achieving goals and could speed progress.
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, no achievement is possible without hard work, practice and perseverance.
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