some people say that advetising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things . others people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . discuss both the views and give your opinion?

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Some people believe that advertising affects us significantly on what we want to buy. Others,

however

, think that

advertisements

are so commonly used that we don't pay attention to them anymore. In my opinion,

advertisements

still play a major role in our decisions, and I will discuss both views in

this

essay.

Firstly

, the amount of things that we buy from stores has grown significantly in the

last

decade.

As a result

, nowadays, there has been severe competition between

companies

to attract customers which is the reason why you can see different kinds of

advertisements

on billboards or television programmes.

For instance

, whenever a football match is played, you can see all sorts of

advertisements

coming up, which can disturb the audience resulting them in not paying attention to any

advertisements

on the other hand

, many people believe that

advertisements

are still great at persuading us to buy from a special brand. They think that if

advertisements

were ineffective,

companies

wouldn't spend a large proportion of their venue on advertising their products.

For instance

, Nike spends millions of dollars on advertising its shoes in order to stand out from other competitors,which is one of the reasons

its

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it's

it is

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one of the

best selling

Add a hyphen

best-selling

show examples

companies

in the world. In conclusion, I think,

although

we are bombarded with numerous

advertisements

on the radio or television,and it seems like we pay no attention to them, they still affect us unconsciously, which might be the reason why

companies

still believe in them and invest a lot of money in

this

area.

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some people say that advetising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things . others people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . discuss both the views and give your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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