Some cultures think old people are of higher value than the youth, while other cultures value the youth more. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In certain cultures,

people

believe that older

people

have more value than younger ones. On the other side, others believe young generations have more value. In my opinion, both have equal values and I will discuss in detail about

this

in the below paragraphs.

To begin

with, old

people

have more experience and knowledge compared to younger ones. I agree that younger ones can learn more things from them which will eventually help to improve their knowledge.

For Instance

, a person with more experience in a company will train and mentor the fresher on the job.

This

will help a new joiner or a young person with less experience to go on the right track and perform his duties well.

Similarly

, we can

also

see that an experienced person's advice will help to tackle the problems that arise in personal life and even during work.

On the other hand

, we can

also

see youngsters are more energetic and passionate about learning new things. We can see that old

people

will have some difficulties when it comes to learning new technologies.

Also

, they cannot compete with the young generation for being fast and active during work or any activities.

This

way we can see even younger generations are equally valued to bring society to a better shape. In conclusion, on the whole, I would suggest both older and younger generations are valued equally

instead

of being one of them valued higher than the other. By doing

this

we can get more benefits to any culture.

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task response

To improve your score for task response, ensure that your essay provides an extended and well-developed discussion on the reasons why some cultures might value older people more, while others prioritize youth. It is essential that you equally balance the discussion between the two perspectives before giving your opinion. Provide in-depth analysis and reasoning for your view.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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such as
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Linking words
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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

6.5

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

254 words

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