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online shopping seems to be replacing the traditional method of buying. however some buyers are sceptical to this practice. discuss both benefits and risks associated with online shopping

#method #buyers #practice #risks
Nowadays, in
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 modern ,era there are many different ways of shopping. Online shopping has been easy to buy
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both views in upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, online shopping is
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 largest platform
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 buying
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 many people attached because it provides good quality items and
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 discount on
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 these days there are numerous kinds of
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shopping sites.
such
 as Amazon,
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 and Flipkart there are many famous applications in public for online shopping.
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 individuals have insignificant options they do not find
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 best choice
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 their local shops and malls.online shopping store has many options for the public they can buy easily
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 their special events.
for instance
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showed 60% of people choose online shopping option Rather than going to shops and malls.
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 online shopping provides bad quality
products
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they have no return option
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 the item and it completely wastes
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money. Another risk, it delivered an order in two weeks period of time and some it delayed on their item. According to a study, online shopping has limited options and discounts. Individuals like to order inexpensive
products
 rather than expensive items. To conclude, internet shopping is the largest platform for buying
products
 and it is easy to purchase items rather than offline
products
. But sometimes it delayed their order and provide a bad quality thing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled convenience
  • vast selection
  • digital platforms
  • comparison shopping
  • impulsive buying
  • aggressive marketing tactics
  • risk of fraud
  • counterfeit goods
  • compromised personal data
  • immediate satisfaction
  • physical examination
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