These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

Presently, the number of fathers who stay at home and take
care
of their kids has been rising as well as mothers going out to
work
.
This
essay will not only give the cause of
this
issue but
also
evaluate if
this
situation is a good or bad thing. There are many reasons why the number of fathers staying at home and mothers going out to
work
has been increasing.
First
and foremost, the most important is that
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currently people take equality as an enhancement issue,
for example
, they think
both
taking
care
of children and going out to
work
do not belong to a particular gender but it can be switched by agreement of
both
husband and wife. Another reason is that in
this
day and age almost all of the jobs which men have the ability to do, women can do so as well, to be specific, physical strength skills like lifting or carrying heavy objects which people who
work
in fast-food have to carry heavy frozen stuff and some of them are females. Due to the aforementioned cause, there is only positive side to
this
development, the
first
of which is it not only benefits one particular gender but
also
both
, because
both
of them can decide who is going to
work
and who is going to take
care
of the kids regardless of their gender they could choose who
going
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out to
work
based on their salary or even their desire which could bring more happiness in their family. In conclusion, there are a number of factors why fathers choose to take
care
of their kids and mothers are more likely to go out and
work
has been rising. In my view, I only see the positive side of
this
development.
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