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These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

#fathers #home #care #children #mothers #work #development
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Presently, the number of fathers who stay at home and take
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 of their kids has been rising as well as mothers going out to
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.
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 essay will not only give the cause of
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 issue but
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 evaluate if
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 situation is a good or bad thing. There are many reasons why the number of fathers staying at home and mothers going out to
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 has been increasing.
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 and foremost, the most important is that
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currently people take equality as an enhancement issue,
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, they think
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 taking
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 of children and going out to
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 do not belong to a particular gender but it can be switched by agreement of
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 husband and wife. Another reason is that in
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 day and age almost all of the jobs which men have the ability to do, women can do so as well, to be specific, physical strength skills like lifting or carrying heavy objects which people who
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 in fast-food have to carry heavy frozen stuff and some of them are females. Due to the aforementioned cause, there is only positive side to
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 development, the
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 of which is it not only benefits one particular gender but
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, because
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 of them can decide who is going to
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 and who is going to take
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 of the kids regardless of their gender they could choose who
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 out to
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 based on their salary or even their desire which could bring more happiness in their family. In conclusion, there are a number of factors why fathers choose to take
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 of their kids and mothers are more likely to go out and
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 has been rising. In my view, I only see the positive side of
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 development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breadwinner
  • caregiving
  • paternal leave
  • societal perceptions
  • gender roles
  • flexible working conditions
  • personal preference
  • father-child relationship
  • emotional and social development
  • household responsibilities
  • career opportunities
  • professional achievements
  • balanced parenting
  • earning potential
  • social stigma
  • societal pressure
  • discrimination
  • traditional mindsets
  • resentment
  • adjustment
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