Some people think that it would be better if whole family(Ex.Uncle,aunt and grand parents) involving in bringing up children rather than only parents. Give your opinion ?

Family is an integral part of our life. A family serves as the
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reasons why people believe it is not good to grow a child with only their parents . The
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society is filled with nuclear families. Often it seems that children from nuclear families grew up alone because their parents both do jobs to fulfil their needs.
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