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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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Given the fact that moving around the world is getting more frequent nowadays due to the development of tourism, it is undeniable that many citizens assume the possibility of
language
homogenity
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homogeneity
.
As a result
, English, as a renowned and the most regularly-used
language
, is dubbed to be the
one
-standing
language
.
This
 essay will suggest that shattering the
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communication
communaction
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communication
 barrier and endorsing human equality will be the main benefits of
one
language
, while the fading of vernacular and nationalism
are
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 likely to be its collateral damage. On the
one
 hand, different
language
 is always perceived to be the main barrier to communication between two persons of different nationalities. By having
same
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 means to communicate,
this
 obstacle is going to be annihilated, and people around the world will have found an easy way to understand each other.
Furthermore
,
this
 will probably eliminate the assumption of “superior and mediocre” stratification, which is distinguished by the
language
 people speak.
This
 will perhaps promote equality among
earth’s
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 inhabitants due to their similarities in the
language
 used.
On the other hand
, having only
one
language
 will obviously
ravange
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ravage
revenge
 the existence of
diversty
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diversity
 and local wisdom of some
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countries
coutries
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countries
. The existence of numerous vernaculars which is regarded as cultural richness will likely come to extinction, and nothing can be considered local wisdom anymore. In
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addition
additon
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addition
, losing national identity will be undeniable if there is no particular
language
 in
certain
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 country.
For instance
, we cannot identify which people are British and which community is Indonesian since they both speak
one
language
 fluently. To conclude, using
one
-globally spoken
language
 is arguably
adventagous
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advantageous
 for avoiding misunderstanding between
comunicants
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communicants
 even when they come from different regions, but at the same time, losing self-identity is an obvious menace.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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