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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In the technology
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 a large number of citizens tend to read electronic
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instead
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 of printed
books
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. Several benefits will be gotten by readers like more economical, and simple.
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, reading
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books
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 has some drawbacks like uncomfortable eyesight which will be discussed in
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 paragraph. There are two main
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 for
people
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 who prefer to read
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books
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, in advance of technology many resources for students are available on the internet,
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lot of pupils download many
books
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 for their reference.
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,
people
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 can download it for free, even though several
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books
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 on a particular website should be paid
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, it is still affordable for
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a student
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student
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students
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.
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,
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academia
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 website,
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 45.000 Rupiah per month
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then
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 will get
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access to read all the
books
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.
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, most
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the student
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student
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students
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 prefer to collect their
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 on
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smartphones
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,
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laptops
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 or
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tablets
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.
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,
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the student
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students
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can easy to carry their stuff and read
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books
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 everywhere.
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, pupils don’t need a huge space to build
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a library
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 for collecting paper
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.
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, some negative impacts will be faced by readers like uncomfortable
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eyesight. Some
people
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a problem
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problems
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 when they read
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an e-book
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e-book
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e-books
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, because of the
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 of looking
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 the screen, which is caused many students
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eyeglass
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eyeglasses
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 in the earlier stage.
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, In recent research, more than 50% of students in the school in Finland use eyeglasses owing to reading
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an e-book
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e-book
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e-books
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.
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, reading
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books
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 give
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a sense
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 of feeling
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, which can only be perceived through paper
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e-books
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. In conclusion, nowadays
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students
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 prefer to read
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books
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 of paper
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, because of cost of reading
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e-book
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e-books
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 became considerable and
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 simple to carry anywhere.
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,
this
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 trend
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 some drawback which should be tackled by readers.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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