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Today people are living in a throwaway society where they use things for a short time only and throw them away. What are the causes of this and what problems can it lead to?

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 are living in a throwaway society where material goods are used for
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 duration of time.
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easy
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 will discuss some of
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 causes and solutions for it.
Rise
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 in social media engagement has contributed 
people
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 vogue.
People
 follow their
idol
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 and friends on social media and are influenced by what they wear, eat, use and the trend they set in their everyday life. These trends are often limited to
short
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 duration of time.
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,
people
 buy
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model
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 of
phone
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 each year for the sake of remaining up to date on
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trend
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 or because someone they admire has one. Waste of natural resources is one of the prominent problems
resulted
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by
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throwway
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throwaway
 society. Various types of natural resources are utilized for the production of modern goods which are often nonrenewable.
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of
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chips required in cell phones. To
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conclude
 rise in social
media
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 influence is one of the vital
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 of
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throwaway
throw away
trowaway
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the trowaway
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 society that we live in, which
sonner
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sooner
 or later always results in
depletion
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the depletion
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 of valuable natural resources.
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