Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention in school. What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

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in the classroom. On the one hand, the main reason why students hard to concentrate or focus on
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that using
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for chatting.
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released every weekend, male
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tend to more concentrate on their games rather than
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interuption
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boredom with several lessons in their classroom is the
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feel tedious and theoretical with repetitive long lessons from their teachers
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improve their sense of focus. In conclusion, it is many external
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ability to concentrate, but with strict regulations and change in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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