The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourage people from doing activitis which usually involve very little risk To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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would say
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agree, the
media
must restrict how much bad news they report because it mentally
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people. In
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I'll talk about it. I think
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folks should not be intentionally stopped from taking
risks
as it is said if you don't take
risks
you will never be successful.
However
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humans are sensitive to taking
risks
so the
media
should not be spreading negative news.
Additionally
, the
media
must be held accountable for the bad news as it has a destructive impact on people. In conclusion,
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think the
media
has a huge role to play in order to get people more encouraged to
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risks
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