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Some people think that hosting international sports events may be beneficial for a country. Discuss both views.

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one part of
people
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 it is clear that managing
of
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the
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international
sports
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 events may be useful for a
country
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. The other side is arguing that there are only disadvantages. But I am, for sure, from the
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 team!
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 of all, it is clearly
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 that our world develops under the trend of globalisation. And
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 so important nowadays
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not
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 a public society. And one of the ways to not escape from
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international relations is hosting some
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sports
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 events. It helps a lot to make your
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more
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 valuable player in the
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 field.
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, when some
country
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 is planning to organise
sports
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 event, it is starting the
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process
progress
 of
building
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 of huge and
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incredible
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 facilities. Developing infrastructure is a symbol of
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 games,
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.
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, when the games end, all
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sports
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centers
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 continue to be used by people of receiving
country
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. I think, it is a big advantage for national
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sportsmen
sportsmen's
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 and even for the common humans.
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, when some famous
sports
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 event is taking place in a
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, it is a great possibility for
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cultural exchange. From my point of view, natives should be amazed
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 new connections and new experiences of communicating with
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foreigners
foreingers
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foreigners
. To summarise, I guess, I would really like to have
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experience
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 in my life: being a part of some huge and well-known
sports
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 event. It is simple to get, that for some people it can be difficult to understand
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other cultures. And because of that, they will be opposite of having big
sports
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 events in their
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home country
homecountry
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home country
. But, as I feel, we should be more
openminded
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