Nowadays many people believe that inspite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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It has been universally accepted that the problem of hunger is escalating
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alarming
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rate.
this
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problem is bringing a state of depression
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the world. Despite
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improvements in agricultural technology still many go hungry
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bed. There are
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of reasons
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the same and its possible solutions can be suggested too which are discussed as follows. In regards to the problem, the main reason which is responsible is
population
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blast
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. As per the research published in the "Times Of India" article no 223,
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population
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is increasing at
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or triple rate in
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5 years. It is impossible to produce that much
food
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any agricultural advancements.
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the cold or dry storage facility is available in big cities with more cost that local farmers can not afford. So even though if we have
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but due to lack of storage facility that will go into wastage. In order to solve
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serious issue , some measures should be taken.
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,
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should impose some laws regarding
population
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people can have only 1 or 2
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, can take reference to china how they have controlled
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growth and now they are able to provide proper
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to their countrymen. Another solution could be
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government
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can provide subsidies to local farmers to open warehouses or cold storage so that
food
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can be stored longer.
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can provide more transportation options so that
food
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can reach from one place to another in less time. To Conclude , even though , advancement has been made in agriculture which is doubled or tripled the
food
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production but still many children are malnutrioned or remain hungry. In the above ,essay we discussed
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solutions .
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, solving
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global issue is not easy but with the joint effort of the people and government can mitigate
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complex issue.
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