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Many young people presently know more about international celebrities than famous people from their history. Waht are the causes. Give solutions to increade awarness of impactful people in history.

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In current times ,youth very well know about the international stars ,whereas they do not know much about once renowned people of their own country. Social media plays an important role in the former. In
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 I will discuss the reasons and solutions. Social media and online platforms like: Facebook ,Twitter and Instagram are a great influence on the life of young adults these sites provide easy access to information about the outside world ,
hence
 Knowing famous personalities of other countries is not very difficult.
However
 ,in order to know about people who played an important part in the history of their native place, they will have to put a lot of effort, like they will have to find books and journals about them and they
also
 might have to go to a real library for that purpose ,which might seem like a lot of work to them. To resolve
this
 issue we might have to think in a similar way as the younger generation. We should include these heroes in their curriculum, and
also
 make their history available online. Movies and biopics on their lives might
also
 interest youth.
Furthermore
 creating social media pages for these heroes will
also
 help preserve their glory. Apart from these efforts government can
also
 announce holidays in their honour. To sum
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 up, I would like to say that with some effort we can keep, the stories of these impactful personalities alive forever. Using those methods popular amongst youth can be a smart way to attract their attention to their national heroes.
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