It is important for people to take risk, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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The maps illustrate an industrial section of Norbiton currently and how it will look development in the future after development. overall, with the addition of some new facilities like shops and schools, and replacing factories with houses, it will be prepared to accommodate people. At the moment, there is a roundabout in

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of the roundabout, which connect the surrounding factories. There is

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farmland and a river on the north side site of the town, which will remain unchanged after its development

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, It's planned to remove all factories in favour of houses for people to live in the future A new roundabout will be added in the south part of the town and some shops and a Medical Centre will be constructed

to it

Moreover

, a school will be built at the end of the road which runs from west to east and a playground will be built upside the road,

to the school. A new road running from south to north

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