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In some cities all over the world traffic is a big issue. What are the causes and what decision could be taken to counterbalance the phenomenon?

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Is comfortable
transportation
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 impossible? With the development of downtowns,
traffic
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 congestion has become a significant problem. While the number of
cars
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 and non-planned urbanization cause preventing
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 flow, encouraging companies, which offer high-tech for urban
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, can make our roads useful. What strikes one
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 about our roads is that they are occupied by individual
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, which means that 80% of
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' seats are empty. On top of that, families own more than a car,
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 they do not need to extra vehicle.
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 is because there is no system for accessing a car when they need to use them. Another contributing factor is unplanned urbanization which causes vehicle movement problems. Notably, the ways and parking areas were designed improperly. To illustrate
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 point, In Istanbul, many skyscrapers obstruct the construction of the necessary multistorey car parks, for
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 reason, congestion is inevitable.
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, improper buildings which make streets narrow are the principal reasons for
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. The method of dealing with
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 is that local management can increase mobility by supporting vehicle-sharing models. Not only does it enable decreasing the number of
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, but it
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 creates new spaces for parking. It is exemplified by a company called Martı, which aims to provide sharable
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 so, unnecessary
cars
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 can be abolished.
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, they are planning to create their own underground parking system.
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, new innovative startups and local management should work together to solve
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 problems. In conclusion,
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 which has several reasons is a most striking issue in crowded cities. Cooperation between cutting-edge technology manufacturers and municipalities can clear the way for new means of
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, which can solve
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 congestion.
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