Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent to do you agree?

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Nowadays, moving to different cities and countries is
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thing and adapting to
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environment
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who is in the same city since birth.
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India,
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has 28 states and each state has its own customs and traditions. Every state has its own language to communicate and has different festivals to celebrate. People
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to different places for work and study,
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individuals
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difficulties involving
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different
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community due to language barriers, way of living and
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practices. As far as I am concerned, I believe
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should be flexible enough to adapt
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new surroundings. As per internet sources, it is found that people who quickly get comfortable in different
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are much
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happier than the
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who don't. It not only enhances
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but
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helpful to fight in tough situations of life.
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, my friend Deepak, who
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and brought up in Delhi,
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did his education
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the same city. He got selected
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government jobs in
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of the major banks in India and he got posted in Chennai. He faced so many problems in his life with
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posting as he couldn't able to establish a relationship with his colleagues. He got frustrated with the new environment, ultimately he had to resign from his dream job.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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