Some people prefer to relax by doing physical activities, while others choose mental activities such as crossword puzzles or chess. Discuss the both views and include your own opinion.

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Information related to innovations as well as changes at West

park

Secondary

School

is depicted in the diagram.

In addition

, data was gathered in 3 different time periods (1950, 1980 and 2010)

First

of all, the illustration of the initial plan of the institution presents Main Road,

has

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not been renovated since 1950,

School

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a School

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, several houses on the left side and

Playground

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a Playground

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along with

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farmland which

are

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located just

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the background of the buildings.

Then

, in 30 years solitary

school

campus was renamed into the main building, as a consequence of

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Science Block

appeared

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1980.

Besides

, a new Car

park

was added to the

school

site at the left of the Science block. What is more, the green farmland turned into a Sports field.

Finally

, regarding the

last

3 decades period, the Car

park

expanded considerably, whereas both the Sports field together with the Playground reduced in size.

Moreover

, the covering of the parking returned to the yellow one which preceded

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option. On the whole, West

park

Secondary

School

extended its square and added some modernized extensions.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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