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Some people prefer to relax by doing physical activities, while others choose mental activities such as crossword puzzles or chess. Discuss the both views and include your own opinion.

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Information related to innovations as well as changes at West
park
 Secondary
School
 is depicted in the diagram.
In addition
, data was gathered in 3 different time periods (1950, 1980 and 2010)
First
 of all, the illustration of the initial plan of the institution presents Main Road,
has
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which has
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 not been renovated since 1950,
School
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a School
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, several houses on the left side and
Playground
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a Playground
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 along with
a
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apply
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farmland which
are
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is
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 located just
at
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in
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 the background of the buildings.
Then
, in 30 years solitary
school
 campus was renamed into the main building, as a consequence of
novel
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the novel
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 Science Block
appeared
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appearing
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by
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in
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 1980.
Besides
, a new Car
park
 was added to the
school
 site at the left of the Science block. What is more, the green farmland turned into a Sports field.
Finally
, regarding the
last
 3 decades period, the Car
park
 expanded considerably, whereas both the Sports field together with the Playground reduced in size.
Moreover
, the covering of the parking returned to the yellow one which preceded
1980’s
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the 1980’s
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 option. On the whole, West
park
 Secondary
School
 extended its square and added some modernized extensions.
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