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Some people think government should subsidies food and vegetables to make healthy food cheaper. Other argues that tax should be set on unhealthy food.

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A nourishing meal is a crucial thing to be considered before purchasing
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 items. Some people hold the views on whether the government should aid fresh fruit so as to reduce the cost of healthy
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 or impose a
tax
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 on
junk
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food
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. it is my view that subsidies for agricultural products will be an effective method for a flourishing lifestyle. On the one hand, it is argued that imposing a
tax
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 on foods which are perilous for a human orgasm like fast
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 will fall buying
junk
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food
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. it is irrefutable that
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 is one of the most beneficial solutions.
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, BY setting a
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 on
junk
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food
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, the government will not only benefit from it in terms of increasing the economy but
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 diminish using
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food
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. In spite of the fact that
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 way will not eradicate the problem. To give a clear example, ready meals are preferred by many people who do not have enough time to prepare something to eat. because of a hectic schedule.
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 why
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 process has less impact to tackle
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 issue than others.
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, I believe that subsiding
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 and vegetables will make wholesome
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 inexpensive. One of the main reasons is that it will trigger farmers to cultivate more crops.
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 will be the reason that people can afford more nutritious foods because planting a vast number of harvests will fill markets will a variety of nourishing foods.
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, both customers and farmers will take advantage of it. To exemplify
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, authorities support agriculture to cultivate more products in Ukraine. Nowadays, they will not only provide their whole country's product but
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 supply other countries. To conclude,
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 it is believed that imposing a
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 will reduce demand for
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, ı support those who believe that subsiding fruit and vegetables will set up a healthy lifestyle.

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