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Older people often say that their life was better in the past than it is now. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The older generation crowd are not comfortable in the new fast-growing world, they often say that the old days were way better than
today
. It can be because in present-day's ,
the
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life
 we deal more with technology or gadgets rather than people. I am concise in the statement.
firstly
, talking about why the older citizen is saying that past
life
 was better than
today
? it can be because in
today
's busy or hectic schedule society forgot about social
life
 like attending meetups or public gatherings. In the past ,days folk used to meet daily and
this
 was the reason why their relations were nice. In
today
's
life
 crowds meet after years, for ,
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example I recently saw my friend at the shopping mall after four years, we were nice friends back
then
 in school time. so
this
 can be the reason why they don't like present
life
.
secondly
, why they might be thinking in
this
 way, nowadays we can see the rise in pollution is increased very badly in fact, scientist says because of pollution, it can affect environment like temperature can be increased rapidly,
also
 on comparing
today
's
life
 we have done a large amount of deforestation just to make room for farms and society,
this
 can
also
 lead to increase in temperature
for instance
 if the trees are cut down
then
 carbon dioxide present in the air will be higher and
this
 will result in less production of oxygen. To summarize, the old crowd says that
life
 in their younger age was better than present
life
,I have discussed what could be the possibilities why they might be thinking in
this
 way ,
also
 community nowadays should attend public meets and
also
 do plantations.
this
 will lead to healthy relations in public.
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