People can know about cultures and life through internet. So there is no need to travel to other countries to know about the culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Citizens have been using the internet to know about other
cultures
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, and there is a belief that there is
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necessity to travel abroad to know other
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disagrees with
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statement because tourists need to interact with each other to better understand a
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and it is important to avoid that many airline companies fire their employees due to the low demand. There is a special value when
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visit a
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foreign
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that getting in contact with
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or places gave an emotional
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places. These
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emotions create a concept
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and customs. More importantly, citizens might taste several flavours that a meal might have, so they can have a better
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understanding
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understanding
of a
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, many American
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travel to Mexico to enjoy
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mexican
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cuisine and learn from their
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that later on some of them might open a
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restaurant in California. Another issue is that some
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because many
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fired their employees due to low demand
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flying. I have no doubt that without
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abroad, there will be
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opportunities for many employees to keep their jobs.
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, local street vendors have lost their businesses
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tourists asking for their services. All
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lead to
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society's balance.
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, in California,
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increases their prices due to low demand
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flying and many
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lost their jobs.
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increment to find more homeless
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to live on
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and
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increases as well. To conclude, in order to know other
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, individuals need to visit the place, know their
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and taste their cuisine to have a better picture of the
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situation
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. There is
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complete information through pictures and videos when it comes to
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a
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. I believe it is essential that
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travel
other
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places to know better a
culture
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