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Some people think it is letter to travel by cars in the city. Other, however think traveling by bicycles is better. Discuss both views.

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Unquestionably, every coin has two sides so are the
people
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. Some folks prefer comfort and some go for a healthy lifestyle
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, using
cars
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 or bikes in the city has become a topic of debate among
people
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.
This
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 essay will compare and contrast both the opinion along with my opinion which is in the favour of using
bicycles
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 rather than
cars
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 in the city more precisely for less
distance
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. will
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 discuss a sensible conclusion. Initiating with the point, that travelling by car in the city is better ,
firstly
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 it is time-saving
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 if someone is going to drop their children to school will take less time.
Secondly
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 , if whether is inappropriate
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 it rains heavily ,
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 it would be the best decision to go by car.In fact,
people
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 don't have to worry about carrying their stuff
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 a stroller or returning from grocery shopping .
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 , travelling by car make life easy and more comfortable. On other hand , Some who held another view say that using
cars
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 for less
distance
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 makes us lazy . I personally believe that if we are going for less
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 ,
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 , park or library we should use
bicycles
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instead
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 of
cars
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.
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, riding a bicycle keeps one healthy and fit .
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 it does not produce harmful smoke like
cars
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 which makes it environment friendly.
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 ,
people
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 don't have to worry about parking or gas which makes
bicycles
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 more cost-effective. To conclude, I would like to say that,
People
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 should use
bicycles
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instead
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 of
cars
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 for less
distance
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 .
however
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, it will depend upon the mindset of
people
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 and their personal choice.
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