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some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligence robots. what is your opinions?

#people #jobs #intelligence #robots
Hello dear, Long time, am happy to hear from you, because even me
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 have missed you too, Since you left
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 lonely even to work around in the evening as we used to do, going to church,
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 and so on, it has not been easy for me, Hearing from you show me that our relationship is still intact. Based on your request,
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 have told you time without number that anywhere you find yourself
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 to adapt,
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 know it will not
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 to be easy with
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 of us but you have to same
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 me. I will suggest for you
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join
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 club, it will keep you busy both soul and body, you know how student life is at
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 every Friday is club neither in the
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 environment or outside the
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, try to engage yourself
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 know you know how to sing very well
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 believe you will forget some of our movement and sleepover we used to do. So
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 to be participating in some
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 ball, which you know that you have the height, so try to make use of your height in other to make your self happy, playing with one or two people in the valley ball pitch one day you will make a new friend, and
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 you may not even remember again.
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 will try to come and see you by
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 week. I wish you well see you
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 bye.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Automation
  • Workplace automation
  • Human intuition
  • Job displacement
  • Collaborative robots (Cobots)
  • Skill adaptation
  • Ethical considerations
  • Economic implications
  • Fully automated workforce
  • Human-machine collaboration
  • Technological advancements
  • Creative industries
  • Empathy
  • Socio-economic impact
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