It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the booming development of technology, it

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far-flung regions, While I can understand that

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development can bring certain merits for human civilization , it is my firm opinion that it is likely to wreak havoc on nature. On the one hand, A school of thought holds that the appearance of human footprints

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remote areas can do

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for both science and tourism. There are an enormous number of unveiled secrets that can be tremendously beneficial for researchers to conduct their studies.

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is a high possibility that scientists can accidentally discover ancient ruins or fossils of a mysterious, alien creature in previous civilizations that

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helps them supplement data and clarify the secrets of ancient civilizations

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potential to serve the future science of human history.

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, the pristine beauty of these areas draw usually

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of travel enthusiasts, which renders their options more diverse for holidays with one-of-a-kind experiences

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, I would firmly assert that these positive aspects are overshadowed by the demerits. When

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easy approach to primitive and thin populated areas, they are inclined to migrate and start their business as the standard of living in

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is high and difficult to accommodate

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needs of them.

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and lead to the repercussions that

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nature here will suffer irreversible damage

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as mass deforestation or industrialization due to poor environmental protection awareness of

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. In sum , it is my firm conviction that the potential hazardous risks of access to remote environments outweigh the possible upsides for the aforementioned reasons.

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Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Finally
In a nutshell
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6Linking words
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1Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

remote natural environment
scientific research
climate change
environmental preservation
economic benefits
conservation efforts
habitat disruption
pollution
cultural disruption
indigenous populations
commercialization
safety risks
personal enrichment
ecosystems
awareness
appreciation for nature

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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Many people believe that it is better to learn something new in a group than individually. Do you agree or disagree

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