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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
It is true that
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 with each other by email and message is convenient. And we are living in
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 century where social media is extremely popular,
people
 use it everywhere. They spend their time using
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 phone and reduce
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 of time seeing
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 other.
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 that it had a negative effect on
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social life. In the past when
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 or social media didn’t
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people
 communicated with each other by letter or to
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 the person they wanted to talked.
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Nowaday
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,
this
 habit hasn’t changed but not usually
people
 prefer using
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 to
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meeting
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. I don’t agree that
people
 don’t use their friends so much because they only meet each other when it is important. The main reason
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people
 don’t see their friends is
because
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 busy
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.
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I’m
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 think in my opinion each
views
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 have
their
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 own reasons.
In
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 the one hand,
people
 can message each other very fast.
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 the other hand when the covid 19
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 is very dangerous
people
 can connect with each other. Of course, I used it to test my friend and talk to them. In the past, it is extremely hard to talk with my friend when I’m not at school but they introduce me
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app
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 and my life changed since that day. I can communicate with lots of
people
 even
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 aren’t near me. In short, each method
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 its own advantages. On the whole, it is logical to accept that there are many reasons for the opposing argument on both sides of the debate. After all, we cannot deny the importance of modern communication methods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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