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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees work from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh disadvantages?

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It has been debated that working from
home
 should be considered than committing at a workplace, while others advocate
this
 argument.
This
 essay will discuss the abovementioned topic and provide an example to support my ideas. One advantage of working from
home
 is the freedom it provides.
Home
 workers can organise their time schedule during their
work
. They might think that living in a concrete building might be stressful and limited by pressurizing surroundings; yet, they can manage their
work
 around their
home
 life as well as they can stop or start time without any permission.
As a result
, some people might prefer the
work
-for-
home
 option because they can control their lives and might create productive
work
 than sit in the rat race. 
Although
 working from their own space might be suitable for time management, they might face challenges
such
 as feelings and unexpected issues. When people are at
work
 and are mixed and surrounded by their colleagues, but woke alone, they are likely to be lonely which could influence creativity.
Furthermore
, in case of an important , decide if a head employee is not in charge, which requires the decision, an employee who lives alone could be misled and tend to use improper methods to solve the situation. To sum up, the advantage of the alternative workplace method which helps
home
 workers to consider life as they please, meanwhile, the negative side is lacking interaction with people which could be contributed to an overlook
in particular
 cases.
Therefore
, employees should consider carefully whether a traditional workplace or an optional method.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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