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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages?

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 of phone usage has been discussed whether it
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 be started early or not. I believe that access to information and satisfaction
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 entertainment are
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 benefits while problems regarding
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eye and the negative impacts on behaviours are major disadvantages. 
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 with, children who start to use
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computer
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 early are able to gain knowledge faster. Looking up on computers and
internet
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the internet
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allow
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 them to experience information and access
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data quicker when compared to those using printed items like books .
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, if their homework relates to mammals, they could find the contents through the internet and learn about their natural habitats and livings in no time.
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, they could spend time enjoying online games or other entertainment sources
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 as movies or music.
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 boost their creativity.
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, spending long hours on
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 could be harmful to the users' eyes.
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 light and
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the screen
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 would affect the children's
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 ,those using computers for long hours could have poorer eyesight and tends to be short-sighted. From my personal experience, I have to wear glasses from my early years because I spent way too much time on the
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 screen.
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computer
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 affects the users' behaviour mainly related to their tempers. Since they get used to fast-paced activities, they might show their aggressiveness when things do not turn out the way they imagine.
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unplesant
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unpleasant
 behaviour. In conclusion, even though the positive impacts of
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using
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in
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 early age are related to access
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 information and other entertainment purposes, they should be aware of negative effects
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 health and
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