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online classes make conventional classroom unneccessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#classes #classroom #unneccessary
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These days, as the Internet becomes more accessible than ever before, the trend of e-learning has exploded. With the appearance of online courses, some people say that physical classrooms have become redundant as the benefits of virtual learning over the traditional classroom. Personally, I believe that
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 is a great experience which can never be completely replaced On the one hand, learning on the Internet is more beneficial than learning in
classroom
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 in many aspects.
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, it is extremely cost-effective. Online
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 do not need many spaces or staffs
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 efficiently dispense with several expenses.
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 allows online courses more accessible to the masses.
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, online courses help learners overcome the difficulties
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and geographical
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 boundaries, which is really helpful
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 for the busy or people in remote areas
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, it is hard to imagine
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 traditional classrooms no longer exist. One of the
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 is that certain subjects require physical interaction.
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, it is impossible to do chemistry experiments in the comfort of one’s own home as there is no equipment.
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, there are elements of a classroom that cannot be emulated in
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a virtual
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 environment.
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, the live activities and discussion in a
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 lecture give children opportunities to improve their soft skills, which
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 difficult to gain in virtual
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 since real interaction is rare In conclusion, while e-learning is superior to conventional learning in many ways, the appearance of traditional
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 is always necessary and can never be replaced
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