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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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People
 will not buy printed newspapers or
books
 in the future because they will be able online reading without paying. I do not agree
that is
 more comfortable to read and easy to mark on
the
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paper
 and some online media
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maybe
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 paid for a complete version.
First
 of all, reading on printed
paper
 makes readers feel comfortable and
be
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able to spend a long time reading. While
people
 read on the special kind of
paper
 like eye care
paper
that is
 made to preserve the eye energy used, they will feel comfortable and easy to mark on the
paper
 for highlight.
In addition
, the attractive print
books
 in colour and good arrangement in a pattern can make the readers spend the money to collect them.
In addition
, online media can save money from purchasing printed
books
,
however
 some resources online
books
 have to pay to get the complete version or total content.
For example
, referencing the academic
paper
 which has to subscribe
a
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publisher to get the total details of the literature papers selected for reference and the smart
paper
 maybe not
free
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 online public. To sum up, I do not agree that
people
 will read everything online without paying and can make them will not purchase
the
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printed media. The interesting printed
books
 are more attractive and reading from eye care
paper
 can make
people
 more comfortable for a long period of reading while some resources of online
books
 are not free to reach the complete details.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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