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To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the best way is to increase the price of fuel What is your opinion on the above assumption?

#hazards #price #fuel #assumption
Nowadays, the environmental problems
increases
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 day
per
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 day and some people think that the best way to resolve
this
problem
by
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 increasing the
price
 of fuel. In my opinion, I think that increasing the
price
 of
fuels
help
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 to reduce the environmental
problem
 and
also
 other methods can be taken to solve
this
problem
 very effectively. I will discuss my reasons for it in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are many reasons why some people think that
rise
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 in
price
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the price
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 of fossil
fuels
help
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 to reduce the environmental problems in the world. To illustrate
this
,
increase
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 the
price
 of
fuels
 help to
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a reduction
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reduction
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 in pollution
problem
, which is now
major
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in
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trend,
this
 is because cars and industries used
high
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 amount of petrol and diesel for their running process, but not other
segmet
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segment
segments
 that it can impact. In my opinion, some other measures can
also
helps
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 to reduce the ever-increasing environmental hazards in the world.
First
 and foremost, we need to stop
on
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cutting
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trees
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tress
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trees
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 and deforestation which help to increase the
rate
 of oxygen , which is beneficial for the public to live in
fresh
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 world.
For instance
,
the
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 government ban
on
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cutting trees
than
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then
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 the
affect
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of
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on
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ozone
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the ozone
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 layer will
be improve
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 due to
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the increasing
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increasing
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increase
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on
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apply
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oxygen
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the oxygen
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rate
 in the earth.
Secondly
,
reduce
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 the industrial output and garbage helps to reduce the water and air pollution
rate
,
hence
 eventually the
earth
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earth's
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 atmosphere level will
be improve
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 effectively and for that reason, the chances of global warming will
also
be
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be decreased
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decrease
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decreased
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. To conclude, increasing in
fossil
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the fossil
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fuels
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fuel
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rate
 impact to decreasing
the
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of the
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 environmental
problem
 effectively but it has
own
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its own
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limitation
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.
Therefore
,
other measure
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another measure
other measures
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such
 as
ban
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a ban
the ban
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 on deforestation and
reduce
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reducing
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the
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industrial output and garbage helps to decrease the environmental
problem
 very effectively.
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