Some people believe that the best way to encourage children that have a healthy diet at school and some people believe that parents should teach them to have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Some argue that living in the country makes it simpler to lead a healthy lifestyle. Others think that residing in
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has health benefits. In my opinion, I
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as the countryside encourages greater activities. The essay will analyse both sides of
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view before clarifying the conclusion. On the one hand, villages provide numerous priceless benefits that are entirely lacking in
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with, a villager has access to fresh water and air.
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who live in a village have less likely to contract illnesses because there is no
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pollution with smoke. The city can protect residents from overt threats but it
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exposes them to covert danger,
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as filthy air, water and surroundings.
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, eating fresh meats,
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picked from the garden, residents in
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live closer to nature. Contrarily, fruits, vegetables and other foods are preserved and treated with
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, which can seriously impair
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health. In conclusion, being in the countryside brings vegan natural things that are good for health and the spirit.
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, new technological developments have improved the quality of life in
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areas. To explain, metro living provides
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system
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and structured educational institutes that improve the quality of life for the majority of
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in
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contributes to the improvement of the quality of life for city
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. In conclusion, despite the modern medical facilities present in
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, the less passive living in the countryside makes it healthier generally.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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