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Public holiday celebrations are held by most conutries. Some people say that governmnt should spend money on other useful things! Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most of the
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used
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 to hold public holidays
such
 as festivals and national days. A few folks claim that authority should invest money in other fields that are useful for the
nation
's development
such
 as education, science,
innovation
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and innovation
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 of technology. I totally agree with
above
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the above
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 statement because of the various reason which I would discuss in the following essay with appropriate examples and explanations. The
first
 and foremost reason to support the above statement is that the authority money is
a
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crucial for the development of the
nation
. So, it should be invested in
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the important
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sector
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sectors
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 like education, science,
technology
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and technology
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 innovation.
This
 would give
a
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plenty of job
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to
the
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civilian
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civilians
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 as
nation
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a nation
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 would get
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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citizen
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citizens
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.
Hence
, it should be invested in
such
 crucial fields.
Last
, if the funds
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 for public
holidays
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holiday
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 celebrations,
then
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the authority
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authority
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authorities
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 would not have
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sufficient
suffiecient
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sufficient
 money to invest
on
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those field
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that field
those fields
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.
As a result
,
continent
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the continent
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 would not get knowledgeable people And
this
 would lack the
nation
 behind in development and
economy
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the economy
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 would
also
 drop. In
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conclusion
conlcusion
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conclusion
,
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government
giverment
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the giverment
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 should prioritize the
imprtamce
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importance
 of the
secters
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sectors
. And spend their fund on
acience
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science
, education and technology.
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