Public holiday celebrations are held by most conutries. Some people say that governmnt should spend money on other useful things! Do you agree or disagree?

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Public holiday celebrations are held by most conutries. Some people say that governmnt should spend money on other useful things! Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society? Give reasons for your answer. Agree or Disagree Write at least 250 words.

Many countries have compulsory military service for men after they leave school. I would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men and possibly women.

In some cities of the world, cars are replacing bicycles. However, in some other cities, bicycles are replacing cars. What are the reasons for 2 developments? In your opinion, which is better.

Many feel that happiness is mainly an individual responsibility while others feel that there are important external factors. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The chart the results of a survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.