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In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced?

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Nowadays, In most countries it has been seen rapid growth in economic development due to that living standards have
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 , the Rural or countryside is less developed comparatively.
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 could bring
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 problems as a
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 whole . In
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 highlight some possible solutions. As the population is increasing rapidly in any of the
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 like city or town but the living standard has increased in the urban area only so as
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 they have to move to the city .
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, every person or youngster cannot afford to move to a different place to study which leads to drawbacks for a nation not only for individuals or parents. Another hand, Government
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 focus on infrastructure in urban
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 and neglect rural area ,
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the city
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 centre has well-maintained road or street lights rather than
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 town or village due to
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 there are more criminal activities in
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. To develop the
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 as a whole ,
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 should focus equally on each area of the territory whether it is downtown or a small village.
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 facilities should be provided equally by opening big schools and the
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availability
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's future means
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 will get a proper
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.
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, health care facilities should be taken care of properly like hospitals should have all the required equipment so that in case of emergency people don't have to worry about mishaps. To sum up, Countryside is the most integral part of any
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 and should be taken care of as urban
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 by providing equal opportunities of living standards .Small villages or towns
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 add beauty to the
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 and
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the government
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 should focus on both
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 so that there won't be any above-mentioned problems in the future.
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