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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Recently, living alone is a trending trend that spread out over the world. In my opinion, living independently is rather a positive development than negative development. Living on your own can have a lot of benefits.
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 of all,
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 have to be more responsible for their lives, which does not affect them before.
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, all of the choices which they decided can matter to them in the future. To be more specific, a position of accommodation where they live will make them think about how long it takes them to get to work.
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, living alone
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 gain the freedom to do what they can not when they live with family.
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, they can do their personal work
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 as dancing, improving themselves… without annoying other
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.
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, there is no doubt that there are some disadvantages that still exist. The most visible disadvantage is that most of living alone
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 tend to care less about their family bonds. Because of
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, most families can easily break up their ties when they do not have the same ideology and voice in some situations,
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 as talking about politics and norms… In conclusion, I think living independently is a positive development. Even though that still has negative effects on some aspects of human lives, I believe most living out
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 can adjust their personal time to be with their families.
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