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Although you are meant to present your thesis project in one month, your sister is getting married in Spain at the same time. You would like to change dates for your presentation. Write a letter to your professor. In your letter: · Explain the situation · Remind the professor of your academic achievements to date · Ask for a different date to present your thesis

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Dear Professor Hashemi, I am writing to ask whether it would be possible to reschedule my thesis presentation, which is currently scheduled for September 26 at 2 p.m. Unfortunately, my only sister is getting married in Spain at around the same time, and I am expected to attend the wedding and support my family during
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 important occasion. As you know, I have made considerable progress with my academic work. I have completed the main stages of my thesis, submitted the required written sections on time, and received positive feedback on my research methodology and preliminary findings. I am
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 confident that I will be fully prepared to deliver a successful presentation. I was wondering if I could present my thesis on November 4 at 10 a.m.
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. I would be happy to contact the other professors involved and explain the situation if
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 alternative date is acceptable. I sincerely hope that you will be able to accommodate my request. Thank you very much for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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task response
You cover all parts of the task. To make the request even stronger, say why this new day is needed, for example, that it gives you time to return from Spain.
task response
Your tone is polite and right for a letter to a professor. You could add that you can present on another day if November 4 is not free.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter is clear and easy to follow: reason, work done, then request. Keep this order in future letters.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main point, and the links between ideas are smooth. You can make the last request shorter by using one clear sentence.
task response
You clearly explain the wedding, your role in your family, your work so far, and the new day you want.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing are polite, and the letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professor
  • thesis
  • presentation
  • sister
  • wedding
  • Spain
  • date
  • academic
  • achievements
  • grades
  • participation
  • awards
  • request
  • polite
  • understanding
  • family
  • event
  • conflict
  • important
  • hope
  • accommodated
  • statement
  • thank
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