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The government should not waste money on arts as this money would be better spent on other projects like sanitation or infrastructure. Do you agree with the above statement?

#government #waste #money #arts #projects #sanitation #infrastructure
Art
 is
a
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significance
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of
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 our culture. Many people think that authorities should spend
this
 money on other projects rather
to
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waste
on
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art
. In my opinion, I do not agree with the notion as I believe
this
 area is as important as other areas,
moreover
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this
 mode
also
 brings revenue to the association. In
this
essay
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 we will discuss
this
 in detail and will draw an inference.
To begin
 with, without
art
 it is difficult for
our
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next
 generation to relate
with
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to
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 our history.
Furthermore
, investment in
art
as
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 important as spending in other areas.
For example
, museums are
opened
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 where students visited and have knowledge about various cultural values.
An
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Art
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art
 is another style, where the unions tend to spend
since
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decades.
Although
,
this
 area is not considered as vital by the majority,
however
, it has proved to be propitious for many nations in various ways.
On the other hand
,
Infrastructure
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the Infrastructure
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 and hygiene of a country inevitably
supports
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in
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the growth of its economy. Where sanitization ascertains the well-being of its society, area development provides its people with better opportunities
of
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for
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 work and
further
 solves the major issues of urbanization like traffic
congestions
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congestion
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 and living space scarcity. To illustrate, the most developed countries of the globe like the US have
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world-class
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world class
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 infrastructure for their personnel, as well as, the hygiene levels are matchless. To recapitulate, having mulled over
above stated
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 information and deliberating all the facts, it can be
deducted
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 that the government should budget its expenditure in
such
 a way that it benefits its people as well as its community.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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