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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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Nowadays, the major issue is population. Many problems are related
like
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environment
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the environment
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, pollution, illiteracy, unemployment and many more. Many people believe that to
fulfill
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 the requirement of human beings more production of crops is essential in future, one of them is Genetically Modified crops which helps to increase the yield. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of
this
 plan.
To begin
 with,
GM
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the GM
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 method produces the crop in
short
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a short
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 time with
les
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less
 maintenance.
Moreover
, many companies followed
this
 procedure to supply
the
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food to
the
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huge
population
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populations
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countries
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of countries
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.
For instance
,
the
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tomatoes will grow in 1-2 weeks. The
scientists
 will abstract the tissue of
tomato
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the tomato
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 plant and inject
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it to
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to
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 the other plant tissues to behave the same.
Additionally
,
scientists
 are able to introduce a new variety of products.
Moreover
, recently using Lion and tiger tissue,
scientists
 created a new type of animal.
Hence
,
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 is very fast as compared to past years.
On the other hand
, there are many demerits of doing
this
.
Firstly
, the level of nutrition availability will reduce.
Secondly
,
possibility
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 of the soil degradation.
Finally
, the produced
vegetable
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vegetables
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/fruits could
rotten
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 quickly.
For instance
, nowadays,
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vegetables are always kept in the frieze to preserve whereas naturally grown foods can be kept outside for many days.
Thus
,
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 of diseases are more by using frozen and injected food. To conclude, GM crops have many advantages
then
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 the disadvantages. I suggest
scientists
to
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work more on
this
 area and mitigate the demerit of
this
. .
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