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Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home for the company. And give your own opinion.

#companies #offer #employees #opportunity #work #home #company
With the advancement of technology, it is possible to
do
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perform any job from any place across the globe. Some organizations have introduced
new
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 system, where the staff is able to report their duties from
home
.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will explain what the benefits are, and
secondly
, it will describe the downsides of working from
home
.
To begin
 with, the freedom of reporting to
work
 from
home
, allows an employee to
protected
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 from certain diseases.
In these
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 days, where the pandemic has resulted in
lockdown
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of
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all
the
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 world, the approach of working from
home
 has resulted in keeping the
employees
 safe, as well as keeping the company's operation
to run
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 smoothly.
For example
, it has been observed that
,
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 the companies
who
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 had already implemented the system of working from
home
 were successful in running their operations during the pandemic.
In addition
,
this
 approach has helped
employees
 to spend all of their time at
work
, and save travel time, which would ultimately increase an employee's productivity.
On the other hand
, due to
lack
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 of workplace,
presence
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 of family and children at
home
, it is difficult for
employees
 to concentrate on
work
.
Moreover
,
face to face
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 interaction is
must
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 to discuss some confidential tasks of firms.
For instance
, it has been observed that
,
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 having discussions with team members using software
such
 as Microsoft Teams has proved to be less efficient compared to the ones, which were done in the office.
Furthermore
, communication is missing between higher authorities and personnel can be
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big trouble for corporations. To conclude, I believe that reporting to
work
 from
home
 has many bright sides like
safety
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 of
employees
,
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 and more time
given
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 to
work
.
On the other hand
, there are certain downsides
such
 as lack of focus, and
being
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 not able to communicate effectively.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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