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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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More and more individuals over the world are getting some health issues because of overconsuming junk diet;
thus
, considering a higher tax on it is an urgent decision. I totally agree with the idea due to at least two reasons, namely the expensive effect and the possibility to make the campaign for a healthy lifestyle with the collected fund.
First
 of all, it is evident that the main reason why fast food has been becoming a preferable diet these days is the price which is likely affordable for consumers. By charging an additional cost, the cost will be more expensive.
Moreover
, there are two good possible effects that would happen. The
first
 benefit is that some healthy foods can compete with it because they will have equal prices. The
second
 positive side is that there would be no reason concerning the price to buy unhealthy meals.
For example
, in Jakarta, the cost of fried chicken is approximately 10.000 - 15.000 Rupiah.
On the other hand
, the expense of a menu with vegetables is more than 15.000 Rupiah. If the extra charging for the unhealthy meal were implemented, their price would be the same.
Secondly
, money collected from the tax can be used to socialize with the public about healthy living using posters, advertisements and banners.
However
, a number of individuals have not been educated well about the effect of eating too much fast food on their bodies.
Hence
, the campaign would be an effective way to raise awareness among our society to select quality diets.
For instance
, the same as the tobacco tax scheme, there are lots of positive campaigns using the fund to educate our community about the dangers of smoke.
As a result
, there is a decreasing rate of smokers year by year. In conclusion, I strongly agree that taxing more on junk food would be beneficial for our society to prevent overconsumption.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overconsumption
  • Chronic diseases
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Sin tax
  • Subsidize
  • Affordability
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Paternalism
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Industry lobbying
  • Public health initiatives
  • Consumer behavior
  • Regulatory measures
  • Health-conscious
  • Processed foods
  • Fiscal policy
  • Preventative healthcare
  • Behavioral economics
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