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Students tend to choose a part-time job to earn money during the University students’ life, so they cannot balance between the work and study. How could this issue affect the future generation and what are the solutions to have a better life on the university study level?

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Nowadays, it is difficult for
students
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 to manage
university
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fees
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 along with other basic expenses like food, clothes and accommodation, so they choose to do some part-time jobs along with their
studies
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.
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,
this
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 doesn't make a good balance between work and study as it is overhead for the individuals and
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 impacts their academic performance.
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 can lead to poor grades and eventually impacts later stages of careers.
University
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fees
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 are at their peak high, so getting educated at a good
university
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 is a dream for many individuals. More and more
students
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 take education loans to fund their
studies
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 as parents are not much capable of paying entire tuition
fees
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 on their own. To manage other expenses like stay and meals, most of the folks rely on part-time work. It is really difficult to manage both study and work at a time
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 it makes a work-life imbalance. It has major effects on their
studies
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 and will certainly impact their professional life.
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, my friend Ashish, who went to Canada for higher
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, couldn't manage his basic expenses on his own so he choose to do a job after his
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 hours. He didn't get proper time to focus on books and
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 got failed in a few of the subjects.
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,
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 not only has an impact on
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' life but on our future generation as well. Our society is in the perception that getting money is more important than doing the job rather than concentrating on
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 and
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 will affect the new generation. Universities should make a clause to restrict
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 to do part-time activities during the ongoing semester.
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, they are free to do full-time during their vacation break. Institutions should
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 support financially poor
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 by reducing college
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 and providing scholarships to the ones who deserved them.
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 to that, if universities can provide accommodation on campus at a low cost that
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 helps. To conclude, universities should adopt best practices in favour of
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 and should help them in every possible way as much as they can to resolve
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 issue.

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