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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the relocation of
professionals
 around the world is very common and easy to do
due to
 the better transportation system and the increase in job opportunities in some countries which do have not enough human resources. Some people say that
professionals
 must
work
 in the
country
 where they studied, meanwhile, others argue that they should be free to
work
 in another
country
.
This
 essay will elaborate on both views and provide the reasons why I believe that
professionals
 should
work
 in the
country
 where they were trained. On the one hand, the advantage of working in the
country
 where they did their training is a better understanding of the local environment and cultures. In each part of the world, there is area-specific
knowledge
 which is mostly acknowledged by local people only.
For example
, there are some diseases which can be found only in tropical areas. If doctors were trained from the countries in Europe, they might have no expertise in
this
 disease.
In addition
, the weather is important for designing and building houses, engineers should know the limitations in the construction area before they start doing their jobs.
On the other hand
, the benefit of working anywhere is the chance to gain
knowledge
 about the environment in different locations. There will be
knowledge
 sharing between the workers and local people.
Furthermore
,
the
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professionals
 can adapt and create a new way of working by adapting the information that they have to the new environment.
To sum up
, the relocation of
professionals
 has both benefits and drawbacks. On the good side, it increases the chances for
knowledge
 exchange.
However
, the impact of those opportunities cannot be compared with the damages that occur from non-local professional decisions. I personally believe that
professionals
 should
work
 in the
country
 that they are familiar with.
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples or case studies to strengthen your arguments. For example, mention specific tropical diseases or construction challenges in particular climatic zones.
coherence cohesion
Use more precise transitional phrases to improve the flow between paragraphs. This will enhance the overall coherence and cohesion of your essay.
task achievement
You presented both perspectives on the issue clearly and concisely, which demonstrates a strong understanding of the task.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion were well-structured and effectively framed the essay's main points.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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