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Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people's lives and should receive more funding.' To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#news #companies #money #people #lives
Media channels are investing in domestic as well as news from other
countries
. I would say that they should invest more
on
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 spreading awareness about the
country
. But, showing the situations of foreign
countries
 are
also
 very important.
Reason
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why a media agency should present the
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, why a media agency should present the situation withing the country more,
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situation
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within
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withing
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within
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 the
country
 more is the interest of the locals. Native speakers are more into the
situation
 within the
country
. Spreading
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awareness
awarenes
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awareness
 about
the
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domestic issues may alarm the
dometic
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people
 about the present and upcoming problems and help them
prepared
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 for
the
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future events.
Also
, in case of natural
disasters
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 the
people
 within the
country
 should be
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informed
infomed
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informed
 immediately so that they can help their countrymates on time. But. keeping the
people
 aware of the international
situation
 is
also
 important. International trade and global trends' knowledge may help the locals to adopt the fruitful strategy within the
country
 to get
maimum
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maximum
benfit
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benefit
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from
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form
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from
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 the outside world. International
crisis
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crises
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, wars and natural disasters may
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 the economy worldwide or
of
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a
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apply
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particular
areas
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area
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, information
of
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which should be reached to the
people
 so that they can prepare themselves for any global crisis. Those who are deciding to migrate must be aware of the
situation
 of the foreign
countries
 so that they can decide better
that
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when and which
country
 to migrate
.
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 Immigrants must know the
situation
 of their native
countries
 as their families and beloved ones live there.
Eventhough
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Even though
, local news seems more attractive but awareness
on
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 global changes is as equally important as local issues
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and can not be ignored.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immediacy
  • relevance
  • community cohesion
  • investigative journalism
  • accountability
  • mismanagement
  • economic argument
  • globalization
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • well-rounded global perspective
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