The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The two charts compare four different retail sectors namely, electronics and applications, food and drinks, home furnishings, and video games in Canada in terms of the rate of their internet
sales
in 2005 and 2010.
Overall
, the percentage of online
sales
for each of the four various changed outstandingly from 2005 to 2010. The figures for food, drinks and computer games declined moderately,
whereas
those for the other two sections dropped. The online
sales
for the proportion of video games were 23%, which was approximately higher
5
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than 5
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% in 2005.
Similarly
, a notable change was witnessed in food and beverage increased by 10% and making it the retail sector with the biggest
overall
rate
of
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in
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the online market.
In contrast
, the sharpest fall was in the home furnishings retail sectors,
while
this
figure was 25% of these
sector’s
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sectors’
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retail online
sales
in 2005, it fell to merely 15% in 2010. Electronics and applications accounted for the majority of online
sales
were 35% and
then
dropped to 30% by 2010.
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