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Nowadays people are not fit and active as before. These will have negative effect in the future health. What are the reasons and solutions to this issue?

In recent
days
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, the
health
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 of
people
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 is not
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 same as in the old
days
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.
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 will have a bad impact
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 our future
health
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 years to come.
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 is so,and give solutions and support with examples
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 issue. Many individuals do not take their
health
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 as a priority. The kind of food
people
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 choose to consume goes a long way to affect their
health
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. We are what we consume and so if we do not eat right, it will affect our
health
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.
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people
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 because of the nature of their
work
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 and busy schedule,tend to eat junk food. They close late from
work
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 or rush from home to
work
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 thereby skipping either breakfast or getting home late from
work
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 just to prepare or buy fast food which
are
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 high in cholesterol and highly spices.
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 foods are known to be a cause of most
heart
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 diseases
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 as hypertension and stroke.
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 issue can be solved by adequately
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planing
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 to
inculprit
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in culprit
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 into our diet healthy meals which can boost our immunity and energize our system.
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, many
youth
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 of today do not like to
exercise
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. Exercising is a way to increase circulation throughout our body.When we
exercise
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, it
improve
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 our brain function,
makes
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and makes
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 us smart and alert for the
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days
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work
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. When we eat and we do not
exercise
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, our body
store
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 most
as
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bad
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 fat or cholesterol.
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, atherosclerosis is a fat deposit on the lumen of the veins which impedes the flow of blood to the
heart
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. It slows down the
heart
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 and ultimately results
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heart
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 failure.
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health
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risk
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 could be avoided by
inculpreting
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inculpating
 adequate
exercises
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exercise
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to
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 our healthy regimen
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,
alcohol
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 consumption is one reason why
people
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 our
health
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 will be affected in the future. These
days
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 clubs and pubs have become a booming business and so after a hard day's
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 , colleague and friends meet to have a drink up to talk and releases stress.
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,
people
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 resort to occasional drinking whereby parties are being organized and mostly
alcohol
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 is served.
Alcohol
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 is known to cause injury to the kidneys when it's highly and
habitualy
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habitually
habitual
 consumed.
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 is dangerous to our
health
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.
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They
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 youth must desist from
alcohol
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 consumption. In summary, individuals must eat healthy,
exercise
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 and limit
alcohol
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 consumption.

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