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IELTS Writing Task 1 - House price in London and England in average

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The bar charts compare how much money people in
England
 had to spend on average on their accommodation as well as that in their capital city and other regions in 2 years, 1995 and 2013. In general, the average
house
 price in
England
, including in
London
, increased over the given period.
Moreover
, the average figure for
England
, in general, was always lower than that of
London
, with the gap being enlarged with time. In the year 2013, Midlands and Northeast were the two regions that had the most affordable
house
 price, while houses in South East, South
West
 and North
West
 cost more considerably. In 1995, it cost 130k pounds on average to afford a
house
 in
England
, while that amount in
London
 was 70k higher. 8 years later, the
house
 price in
England
 increased to 200k. Yet, it took people double to possess a
house
 in
London
, which was over 400k to be specific. In 2013, accommodation in South East, South
West
 and North
West
cost
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 from 200k to over 300k.
However
,
house
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houses
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 in the remaining two regions, Midlands and North East
was
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only priced a
third
 of that in South East, which was just around 100k.
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